Thursday, February 18, 2016

Where is my favourite place?



Where the tui shows off to his friends in the beaming sun.
Where the ocean waves are dancing in the breeze, with the water spraying on them.
Where the crabs are playing hide and seek in the beautiful blue water.
Where if you go up a hill, you will see Bethany camp ground hiding behind Kaiteri.
Where the shells dig into your feet on shimmery sand.
Where is my favourite place? 
Kaiteri.

7 comments:

  1. Hi Imogen
    You are a great writer
    I cannot wait till your next piece
    My favourite line is where the ocean waves are dancing in the breeze, with the water spraying on them!
    I love it
    How do you do it?

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  2. Fantastic job Immy. This is so cool. I really like the part where you say "the crabs play hide and seek in the beautiful blue sea". I will make sure to look out for crabs next time I'm in Kaiteri. Good job .

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  3. Nice work immy I like the detail that you used your words and how you it all made sense

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  4. Well done Imogen it is a great story

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  5. well done immy its a nice poem but were you at kaiteri.

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  6. I limy l love this story it is so good
    it has same great language
    I can't wait to see your next peace of writing

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